Hey Mickie, I posted the progress here so that Aldo (and others) could see my comments and add to them. Overall, it's a huge improvement from the progress in Flash (which I'm sure you're happy about). I'm not sure what her screen left arm is doing on frame 50, is she leaning back on the chair? If so the weight isn't reading. She should also be seated on top of the chair, at the moment it looks as if it's stabbing her bum. The hair flick in the beginning can be faster, to be more consistent with how she does it in other shots. The first hand scroll is pretty graceful so that's looking good. You might be able to lose one of the two screen scrolls at the end. Right now it's a little hard to tell when the dialogue is supposed to take place, is it during those long holds? Nice work Mickie!
I agree with Keith, except that the chair we talked about moving forward so it would be good if you redrew the background with the chair placed where you have Debra now. Also is there a time where she says "not now Jess"? I would try placing the audio into flipbook when shooting so you can time your scene better. For the long hold when she says the dialogue, I feel you can make her either lean back or forward just to push the pose. Keep up the work!
Hey Mickie, I posted the progress here so that Aldo (and others) could see my comments and add to them.
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I'm not sure what her screen left arm is doing on frame 50, is she leaning back on the chair? If so the weight isn't reading. She should also be seated on top of the chair, at the moment it looks as if it's stabbing her bum.
The hair flick in the beginning can be faster, to be more consistent with how she does it in other shots.
The first hand scroll is pretty graceful so that's looking good. You might be able to lose one of the two screen scrolls at the end.
Right now it's a little hard to tell when the dialogue is supposed to take place, is it during those long holds?
Nice work Mickie!
I agree with Keith, except that the chair we talked about moving forward so it would be good if you redrew the background with the chair placed where you have Debra now. Also is there a time where she says "not now Jess"? I would try placing the audio into flipbook when shooting so you can time your scene better. For the long hold when she says the dialogue, I feel you can make her either lean back or forward just to push the pose. Keep up the work!
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